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valkryor(This is something that I find incredibly annoying. Your mileage, etc.)
Okay. Writers, you gotta stop doing this. When you have two people getting nekkid or otherwise ready to fuck, you build up this hot scene and then use that word and it just pulls me out of the story and makes me grit my teeth.
Entrance is NOT SEXY. You might as well be using foyer or vestibule. YOU ARE WRITING SMUT, NOT DESCRIBING ARCHITECTURE. Please stop using architectural words to inform the reader what is going on. It's jarring; bodies are not buildings.
If you cannot think of another way to set the scene, try rewriting the passage without it. Instead of using 'entrance' or 'opening' or 'hole', let the reader fill in that blank. I guarantee it will still be hot.
Sincerely,
A Reader who also Writes Smut.
PS - If you do find 'entrance' sexy, more power to you. I do not and wish that particular use would be consigned to the dung heap along with 'love grotto' and 'pork sword'.
Okay. Writers, you gotta stop doing this. When you have two people getting nekkid or otherwise ready to fuck, you build up this hot scene and then use that word and it just pulls me out of the story and makes me grit my teeth.
Entrance is NOT SEXY. You might as well be using foyer or vestibule. YOU ARE WRITING SMUT, NOT DESCRIBING ARCHITECTURE. Please stop using architectural words to inform the reader what is going on. It's jarring; bodies are not buildings.
If you cannot think of another way to set the scene, try rewriting the passage without it. Instead of using 'entrance' or 'opening' or 'hole', let the reader fill in that blank. I guarantee it will still be hot.
Sincerely,
A Reader who also Writes Smut.
PS - If you do find 'entrance' sexy, more power to you. I do not and wish that particular use would be consigned to the dung heap along with 'love grotto' and 'pork sword'.
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Date: 2022-02-20 12:52 am (UTC)*dies laughing*
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Date: 2022-02-20 02:07 pm (UTC)